My name is Lucy Jeon and I am the creater of this blog, Make It Shine.
To tell you something about myself,
My favorite hobby is listening to musics.
When I am listening to songs I can control my emotions and feelings. I love how music can speak to me and I love the feeling of being drifting in to music.
that's all the reason of why my favorite hobby is listening to musics.
Second, I love making scrapbook.
so that's my favorite hobbies.
You can also find out my hobbies or interest by my new blog, Make It Shine <3
and please leave comment.
Thank you for your time.
-Make It Shine Blog Manager, Lucy Jeon
FIX:
답글삭제You have to write in paragraphs! You should not press ENTER after every sentence.
line 2: creater -> creator (spelling)
line 4: My -> my (lower case)
line 4: musics -> music (music is only singular)
line 6: drifting -> drifted (use past tense in passive voice)
line 7: capitalize "That's"
line 7: take out "all" and "of"
line 7: musics -> music
line 8: scrapbook -> scrapbooks (pluralize)
line 9: "so that's" -> "These are"
line 10: interest -> interests
line 10: by -> in
line 11: take out "and" and capitalize "Please"
Your sentences are clear and fine. You just need to put them into a paragraph and fix some mistakes.
Music is really healing and comforting. I am not a musician, but I also enjoy listening to music! I want to know what kind of music you like. :)
I love Hero, by Mariah Carrey(wonder if that's spelled right):)
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